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Davaran Skyfire Sage


Joined: 10 Feb 2008 Posts: 679 Location: Sanctus, The Kingdom Of
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 6:22 am Post subject: A poem. |
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Quote: | Within the real of tangible beings,
Something spectral lurks and lingers,
Be it not outside my seeings,
but worlds away from anxious fingers.
A vision, angel, perhaps a wraith,
Or some distant pleasant face?
To look upon the be not safe,
so distant now must be my place.
Anon thy lips, so aught to frown
findest solice, comfort, peace?
Aloft our bodies, by leaves now brown,
but for now, mine thoughts thine lease.
A specter lives within my heart,
treading lightly apon my pain,
my heart rapping gently whilst we're apart.
Waiting until you and I are we again.
A silent vigil, rapping anon my soul,
a hierophant my phantasmal deacon
silently,daily, she plays her role.
My love, my dear, my beacon
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Ceinwyn ab'Arawn Transcendent Spammer

Joined: 13 Dec 2004 Posts: 5017
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 6:24 am Post subject: |
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I love this. Did you write it? |
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Davaran Skyfire Sage


Joined: 10 Feb 2008 Posts: 679 Location: Sanctus, The Kingdom Of
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 6:40 am Post subject: |
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Aye I did. The fall of last year. I finally though it was post worthy....or I just found my flash drive again. Deffinatly one of the two. |
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Jonathan Strathmore Certifiable


Joined: 14 Sep 2007 Posts: 1986 Location: Inside your mind.
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 7:02 am Post subject: |
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Very beautiful suh. Nice work. |
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Ceinwyn ab'Arawn Transcendent Spammer

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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 4:12 pm Post subject: |
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Could a mod please move this to art section so it doesn't get wiped out of existence? |
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Darrien Church Honored Member


Joined: 06 Jun 2004 Posts: 1810
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 4:17 pm Post subject: |
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Done |
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Rryn Anyai Journeyman

Joined: 24 Oct 2004 Posts: 244
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 4:42 pm Post subject: |
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so glad you moved it here so I wouldnt miss it.
Beautifully written Davaran. You have great talent with words
You need to share the rest of your work with us soon! |
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Davaran Skyfire Sage


Joined: 10 Feb 2008 Posts: 679 Location: Sanctus, The Kingdom Of
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 5:45 pm Post subject: |
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*hides under some random object*
It was a lot of confusing feeling bubbling to the surface. It was suppose to be about Hester and Dimmsdale's separation in the scarlet letter, but I found some better inspiration. I'm mulling over getting it published. |
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Ceinwyn ab'Arawn Transcendent Spammer

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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 8:18 pm Post subject: |
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While I hate the Scarlet Letter, personally.. I love this poem and I warn you I will probably save a copy to my hard drive. It is really well written and I particularly like the rhyme scheme you use and the flow of the words. The meaning comes across superbly, and is very reminiscent of older poetry. |
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Davaran Skyfire Sage


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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 8:42 pm Post subject: |
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Show me a problem that can't be solved with ABAB rhyme scheme! |
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Jonathan Strathmore Certifiable


Joined: 14 Sep 2007 Posts: 1986 Location: Inside your mind.
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Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 8:55 pm Post subject: |
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Davaran Skyfire wrote: | Show me a problem that can't be solved with ABAB rhyme scheme! |
Open, non-lyrical. |
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