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Toren Smythe
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 21, 2008 3:37 pm Post subject: Poem Reply with quote
Wrote it three minutes ago.

More like one and a half, but eh... time is irrelevant to all things.

Quote:
blanket my hand in a touch of mystery,
your grip feels of a million needles
piercing my skin.
blanket my body in a soft caress,
your form encases me like decay
devouring my flesh.
blanket my lips with a kiss of control,
your will to my whim like command
fascism - my love.
blanket me in your arms as the world disappears,
your smell is my sensation, the only aroma to
intoxicate my life.
blanket me in your love to never again be free,
your love is my emotions 'til
my dieing breath.


Little shakey at the end but I don't really know how to fix it right now.
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NightShade
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 1:20 am Post subject: Reply with quote
*Grins* it is very good, and I dont think the end is shakey, the flow is there and you get the point across.
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Ceinwyn ab'Arawn
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 1:28 am Post subject: Reply with quote
damn commies..
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 1:42 am Post subject: Reply with quote
I'm only a communist at heart.
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